“Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.”

assignment#11b

The day before the bomb was dropped on Hiroshima, the city, in fear of incendiary raids, had put hundreds of schoolgirls to work helping to tear down houses and clear fire lanes. They were out in the open when the suffered bad burns and later developed ugly keloids on their faces, arms, and hands. A month after Tanimoto returned from his second tip to the states, he stated, dozen of them. He bought three sewing machines and put the girls to work in a dressmaking workshop on the second floor of another of his projects, a warwidows’ home he had founded. He asked the city government for funds for plastic surgery for the keloids Girls. It turned him down. He then applied to the Atomic Bomb Casualty Commission, which had been set up to study the radiation aftereffects of the bomb-aftereffects that those who made the decision to drop the bomb had utterly failed for foresee. The A.B.C.C. reminded him that it carried on research, not treatment. (The A.B.C.C. was keenly resented for this reason by hibakusha; they said that the Americans regarded them as a laboratory guinea pigs or rats.) p141

assignment#11a

In the village of Mukaira, he tried to be as inconspicuous-as Japanese-as he could. He sometimes wore Japanese clothes. Not wanting to seem high-living, he never bought meat in the local market, but sometimes he smuggled some out from the city. A Japanese priest who occasionally came to see him, father Hasegawa, admired his efforts to carry his naturalization through to perfection but found him in many ways unshakably German. He had a tendency when he was rebuffed in an undertaking to stubbornly push all the harder straight for it, whereas a Japanese would more tactfully look for some way around. Father Hasegawa noticed that when Father Takakura was hospitalized, he rigidly respected the hospital’s visiting hours, and if people came, even from far away, to see him, outside proper hours, he refused to receive them. Once, eating with his friend, Father Hasegawa declined his host’s offer of a bowl of rice; he was full. But then delicious pickles appeared, which caused a Japanese palate to cry out for rice, and he decide to have a bowl after all. Father Takakura was outraged (i.e. , in his guest’s view, German ): how could he eat rice plus pickle when he had been too full to eat rice alone?p.114